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The Dark Hatter
11-12-2007, 04:02 PM
This is a short horror story i wrote after watching the fireworks at disneyland. I have not researched firework shootings, so this might be unrealistic. :o Hit me up with encouragement, thoughts, musings, comments, ideas, reviews, and even critizism if you want. It's a free country. (-:




WICKED FIREWORKS



My dirty sneakers pounded upon the pavement, making loud, wet noises as I sprinted down the side-walk. CLOSER, CLOSER. I was blocks away from my first firework shooting.



Sweat trickled down my face. My breath was coming out in faint, wheezy gasps. My heart felt engraved in my chest, and it was beating faster than the speed of light. [Or, at least, it felt that way.] My body felt like it could break into a pile of bones any minute, but I didn’t care.



I ran across the road, without waiting for the car to stop. I almost got pulverized.


Finally, I was there. Rotten Cherry Street. I crossed the road again, not waiting for the light to turn red. A big van was coming at full speed. The driver was obviously drunk.

But he wasn’t too close. I was going to make it.
But then, fate. Rotten, stinking, bad fate. My shoes slipped on the wet pavement. I fell on my back. My spine collided with the concrete. I almost bit my tongue in half.
The man in the van honked madly. He accelerated, bent on running over the blurry object in the road. I watched in terror as the crushing wheels grew closer, and closer. Unable to get up, I lay flat on my back, closed my eyes, and waited. Waited for the end. The car was only a foot away. And then…………………………
Fate – Again! Heavenly, blessed, wonderful fate!
The car passed over me, but I felt nothing but air. I opened my eyes, and there I was, lying in the street.
What happened?
I watched the van drive off, realizing the wheels had not reached me. I sighed with relief. And glanced at my watch. Oh No! I was three minutes late!
My feet pounded against the sidewalk. A little shaky, but still alive, I stood on the curb where I was supposed to meet Skull. {He was the supervisor of the whole program.}
A man stepped out of the shadows of a dark alley nearby. He was almost completely brown-skinned, except his face, which was pale as Clorox. I shivered.
“Finally you are here. Just on time. The others did not come, but you will do PERFECT. Follow me.” He turned and started walking down the alley.
Why did he say I’m just on time? I thought, I’m 5 minutes late.
"Uh... I'm not sure I should," I said, gulping.
Upon hearing this, Skull spun and stared at me with a menacing look.
"Why not?" He asked, his grinding his teeth.
"I'm not supposed to follow strangers," I replied nervously. My stupid stomach was doing sommersaults again.
"Oh no," he replied, quickly, "I'm no stranger. See?" He held out a small card like a police's badge.
"Skathen Anders," it read, "Proffessional Firework Shooter."
I can't beleive i fell for it.
"Alright," I said, following him like the fearless idiot I was.
Soon we came to the shooting area. Three men stood by the launchers, smiling ghoulishly. I gulped. Skull’s hand was gripping my shoulder like a vise.
“Now,” Skull, his face the exact picture of a grinning skull, “THIS is how you shoot a proper firework.”
As if on que, the men grabbed me. I struggled, but it was no use. I tried, to scream, but Skull’s hand was clamped tightly over my mouth.
I could only watch in horror as another thug tied me to the biggest firework I had ever seen. Then skull and his cronies released me. Once again I struggled, but the ropes were tied tightly. I yelled as loud as I could, but no one heard me.
“Have a nice trip,” Skull said ominously. He lit the end of the firework with a match. The fuse traveled across the rope, then reached the rocket.
There was an ear-piercing screech, and I found myself flying into the sky. I closed my eyes tightly and waited for fate to help me out again. But it didn’t.
Far below, a large crowd of people watched the explosion in awe, completely unaware of my screams.

Alyss Heart
11-12-2007, 04:26 PM
Creepy......
But it's good!

The Dark Hatter
11-12-2007, 04:29 PM
You actually think its creepy? I had a friend who read it and he thought it was lame. Then again, he's seen Saw, which makes other horror stories look like silly fluff. Thanks. :)

The Dark Hatter
11-16-2007, 11:37 PM
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raven123789
11-16-2007, 11:47 PM
i'm not really the type of person who gets scared,but it was interesting

your descriptions were good,it sorta felt like i was the one running down the street

The Dark Hatter
11-17-2007, 03:20 PM
glad u liked it. (-:

Alyss Heart
11-17-2007, 04:02 PM
You actually think its creepy? I had a friend who read it and he thought it was lame. Then again, he's seen Saw, which makes other horror stories look like silly fluff. Thanks. :)

Your welcome!

Alyria_Bella
11-18-2007, 08:51 PM
Not so much a horrer story but a thriller (personally i prefer thrillers to horrer)
and you don't need to have seen saw to know whats a good read(and clearly it dosen't help because that was good correction that was great)

The Dark Hatter
11-19-2007, 10:29 AM
Thanks. Yes, thrillers are a bit better than horror, usally. Thrillers are a lot more beleivable, which makes it easier to draw me in. Have you evr heard of R.L. Stine? He does both genres, and he's very creative. He's done some really scary short stories. (-:
Also, I didn't say you need to see Saw to know a good read; I have never seen it, and, persanally, i never want to. It looks like plain stupidity.
If you ask me, though, my friend is a bit bloodthirsty. He's kindof on the numb side when it comes to horror. (-;

Alyria_Bella
11-19-2007, 02:18 PM
Saw does look stupid my friends are the same on the weekend we went to the movies not knowing what one we were going to see and they ended up seeing saw 4 and i was all like forget that i got better things to do than lose my lunch so thay came out all pale and OMG and i was like look cute shoe shopping and no gore involved(well except for that idiot who went to grab the shoes i wanted:D )

The Dark Hatter
11-19-2007, 02:42 PM
Yes, Saw is like the dumbest movies ever. There's hardly any plot, its all just guts flying everywhere. Grossness. And for some strang reason, its like the most popular movie nowadays. :mad:

Lord of Spades
11-22-2007, 04:55 PM
That was actually pretty good for a short story. I have been working on a small novel (I know, scary for my age, but i'm being forced) if I can figure out how to attach it I'll let you all read it. It is a two part novel from two different stand points, I will give you mine.

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It won't let me attach, says 'Invalid File', but the size and everything is right...:(

The Dark Hatter
11-23-2007, 01:49 AM
that is weard that it won't let you attach it but you can copy and paste the text (if you have word) like explained in my pm is sent u.